updates on "The McGuffin"

In this story, we open with our main character making a strange transaction with a shady figure. We open with the main character starting down a set of stairs into a very old basement. somehow with large amounts of money, the main character makes a deal with the shady character for a mysterious box, its contents unknown, except to the shady figure and our main character. dialogue is exchanged about the importance of the box and how others are looking for it. the shady character strongly explains the importance to the main character the fact that the box must remain hidden, or locked away otherwise an unfortunate set of events might befall not only him, but many others. the main character says something like... "well im not going to just let it sit on the top of my fuckin dresser."

---I would like the treatment of the contents of the box to be as if it were a list of some sort of sensitive information that many may not want to be revealed.---

the main character leaves and the shady figure is approached by another shady character. their conversation starts off screen "yeah?... can i help you, or are you just gunna stand there you dumb shi....(sounds of a semi-automatic gun going off) - here the camera will record the flashes of light from the gun on the wall as the audience hears the gun and the soft thud of the first shady character's body hitting the floor.

the main character runs into another character who jumps him and robs him of the box. the main character finds a clue that leads him to the robbers hideout where he fights and kills the robber and gets the box back. at the end of the short, our main character returns home and locks the box away in a safe, which is then locked in a cabinet.

approved settings for film:
basement in beginning
park near robbers hideout
main characters house
inside car with main character

house in which basement scene will be filmed


park in which main character kills robber